Fanfiction: Malocchio (Fullmetal Alchemist)

[nebroadwe]

Title: Drabble: Malocchio
Fandom: FMA (anime or manga version)
Pairing(s): None.
Rating: G
Word Count: 100
Warnings: None.
A/N: Written in response to this challenge and crossposted from nebroadwe to Höllenbeck (i.e. hagaren_manga, fm_alchemist, fma_gen, fma_writers and fma_fiction). This is my first time taking this character's POV; concrit welcomed with fireworks.
Dedication: For evil_little_dog, who is doing all kinds of strange things to my head this week.

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      The desert moon was the largest he'd ever seen, an enormous copper platter oxidizing in the sunset, blemished beyond hope of scouring clean. His colleagues hated it: the light showed everything up, left them vulnerable to night attacks by guerillas who knew every trick of blending into the shadows it cast. Some of the enlisted men, country boys, made covert signs against bad luck; others muttered that the enemy's god was spying on them, ill-wishing them ...

      Experimentally, he lifted his hand between Ishbala's jaundiced eye and his own until his palm just blotted it out. "Bang!" Kimbley whispered, and grinned.

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[Acknowledgments: Fullmetal Alchemist (Hagane no Renkinjutsushi) was created by Arakawa Hiromu and is serialized monthly in Shonen Gangan (Square Enix). Copyright for these properties is held by Arakawa Hiromu and Square Enix. All rights reserved.]

Comments

[evil-little-dog.livejournal.com]

OOOOOOOOoooOOoo. LOVES.

Yay, Kimbley. So twisted and...twisted.

who is doing all kinds of strange things to my head this week.

...all sorts?

*cackles at the implications*

[nebroadwe.livejournal.com]

OOOOOOOOoooOOoo. LOVES.

My work here is done. (Thank goodness.)

Yay, Kimbley. So twisted and...twisted.

Yeah. I worked on a character sketch of him once, but I put it aside because I couldn't get the language right. Here, he just has to be a hundred words' worth of creepy, most of which isn't directly about him. Phew.

...all sorts?

*cackles at the implications*

Hey, I thought for a while there I was just going to have to draw the curtain on Ed and Winry, but fortunately Ed's got an antigenius for romance. :-)

[evil-little-dog.livejournal.com]

Here, he just has to be a hundred words' worth of creepy, most of which isn't directly about him. Phew.

I like writing Kimbley. Envy. I can't get my head around Envy. Really, any of the homunculi - except for Manga!Wrath. They're like...will o' the wisps or something, as far as I'm concerned. Mainly because I just can't get a real feel for what they're trying to accomplish, I think - a new Philospher's stone? Okay, but...why???? I mean, obviously, there is a purpose but I'd like to know what the purpose is.

Winry's kinda relieved that it took the turn it did. She's got enough on her plate in my head right now, what with the "holiday fic" I'm trying to work on. *soothes Winry with copies of Automailer Weekly and the most recent God's Studio catalogue*

[artemisrae.livejournal.com]

Kimbley <3

He's one of those characters I kind of want to just shake and ask what traumitized him as a child.

[nebroadwe.livejournal.com]

That ... probably wouldn't end well. [covers eyes]

[artemisrae.livejournal.com]

Which is probably why I've never tried to write him myself. I beat Ed up all the time and he NEVER tries to blow me up.

[mulzrule.livejournal.com]

Kimbley's great isn't he? He's one of those bad guys you know you're supposed to despise, but he still comes off as cool. You captured his sadism. (did I just make up a word? >_<)

[amorphic.livejournal.com]

Ah, Kimbley. He's definitely on the nominations list for my favourite bad guy, just because he's so twisted and such a sadist =P

Great drabble!

[nebroadwe.livejournal.com]

Envy. I can't get my head around Envy. Really, any of the homunculi - except for Manga!Wrath. They're like...will o' the wisps or something, as far as I'm concerned. Mainly because I just can't get a real feel for what they're trying to accomplish, I think - a new Philospher's stone? Okay, but...why???? I mean, obviously, there is a purpose but I'd like to know what the purpose is.

This. I had a story about Envy once that made some sense to me, but I never had the yen to actually write it. It would have involved a lot of OCs and too substantial an homage to Lloyd Alexander, so I just filed it.

Winry's kinda relieved that it took the turn it did. She's got enough on her plate in my head right now, what with the "holiday fic" I'm trying to work on. *soothes Winry with copies of Automailer Weekly and the most recent God's Studio catalogue*

[tiptoes quietly away, not to bother the happily engaged engineer]

[nebroadwe.livejournal.com]

Oh, I still despise him. His pseudorationality in Ishbal makes me want to punch his smirking face, actually -- except that I'd never make contact. :-) I'm rooting for Scar to take him out with extreme prejudice at some point ...

[nebroadwe.livejournal.com]

Thanks! It's the combination of hubris and black humor that got me going here -- Kimbley experimenting with deicide and lovin' it. Rational people back away slowly. :-)

[nebroadwe.livejournal.com]

He thinks of it as a challenge. :-)

[evil-little-dog.livejournal.com]

It would have involved a lot of OCs and too substantial an homage to Lloyd Alexander, so I just filed it.

*wibbles* Lloyd Alexander.

Winry *makes sounds that only dogs should be able to hear*

[cornerofmadness.livejournal.com]

oooo you just have to love Kimbley

[lord-mercykill.livejournal.com]

i wouldn't say kimblee is twisted more like cold, cool, logical,the bad guy who watchs the fun from behind the scenes.
i love the way his mind works. it's very... how to put it?.... interesting,
intregeing. ^_^
that's my 2 cents haha ^_^

[nebroadwe.livejournal.com]

*wibbles* Lloyd Alexander.

God rest him. What a talent. I wasn't as fond of some of his later stuff as I was of the books I read growing up, but I'll be rereading the Prydain series until the day I shuffle off this mortal coil myself.

[nebroadwe.livejournal.com]

He always strikes me as the sort of villain H.G. Wells would appreciate.

[nebroadwe.livejournal.com]

A good villain is a thing of beauty and a joy forever -- in literature, that is. In life, I'd see Kimbley on the train and head for the next car immediately. :-)

[mulzrule.livejournal.com]

Since he wiped the floor with him in their previous fight that doesn't seem far fetched canon-wise at all. I love Scar more so I do root for him.

[cornerofmadness.livejournal.com]

interesting thought. THat hadn't crossed my mind but you're right. I think Jim Butcher and George Lucas would enjoy him too.

Reminds me I need to finished that Roy and Kimbley 7 stages challenge some day. I do enjoy writing kimbley. I just need a few more war time plots

[nebroadwe.livejournal.com]

I had a lot of fun writing Scar, the one time I tried. I'm religious myself -- I know where the pitfalls are.

[nebroadwe.livejournal.com]

You guys have managed to hook my on Butcher -- I must go and comment on lyrangalia's latest and point that out to her, too. Lucas might enjoy Kimbley, but I don't think he'd write him very well. Then again, Lucas blew every bit of kindly feeling I'd developed for his oeuvre with Attack of the Clones, so I may be biased.

Reminds me I need to finished that Roy and Kimbley 7 stages challenge some day. I do enjoy writing kimbley. I just need a few more war time plots

I'd say, "I wonder what Kimbley would do if someone threw a shoe at him?" -- except I can probably guess. Eek.

[mulzrule.livejournal.com]

I hear ya sista!

[cornerofmadness.livejournal.com]

I'm enjoying Butcher enough to go look up his high fantasy series. Eventually...

I'm with you on Lucas those last three should have remain unmade...

snort.it shouldn't BE this hard to think of stuff for Kimbley and Roy to do in Ishbal

[evil-little-dog.livejournal.com]

The Prydain stuff was what I read and enjoyed.

Of course, I'm also a huge fan of Susan Cooper, though I read The Dark is Rising completely out of sequence (my library only had The Grey King and for the longest time, that's all I thought there was to the story). It seems to me that Zog gave me the collected Dark one year and the book was so unwieldy as to be almost unreadable. I should see if I still have it. Unfortunately, I have no relatives of the proper age to foist it off on....

[evil-little-dog.livejournal.com]

Next car? "Excuse me, this is my stop. No, no, I don't mind the train is still moving...."

[nebroadwe.livejournal.com]

[grin] And this is why you will survive Kimbley/vampires/ravening zombie hordes, and I will not.

[evil-little-dog.livejournal.com]

I may freeze at the zombies and vampires...welll, I have a few tricks for them. But Kimbley? Running fast and far. It works. *laugh*

[nebroadwe.livejournal.com]

I'm with you on Lucas those last three should have remain unmade...

I admit to having enjoyed large swaths of The Phantom Menace -- particularly the time I went late in the run with a couple of friends and we had the theater to ourselves, so we could actually throw popcorn at the screen whenever we hit an annoying bit. I spent the entirety of Attack of the Clones rewriting the screenplay so that it made sense. Bleah.

it shouldn't BE this hard to think of stuff for Kimbley and Roy to do in Ishbal

Maybe the desert's getting to you. :-)

[nebroadwe.livejournal.com]

Oooh, Susan Cooper! I always get to the end of Silver on the Tree and want to go back and reread the whole thing from the beginning again.

Why do all these great books get such terrible film adaptations? There's a great BBC miniseries waiting to be made of TDIR, but it'll never happen now. [sighs]

[nebroadwe.livejournal.com]

With my luck, that would just attract his attention. I'm more of the "ignore him and hope he goes away" school.

[cornerofmadness.livejournal.com]

i can't even remember which movie is which now. I've only ever seen them once during their initial runs

I think part of the issue is I just have so many stories out there....

[evil-little-dog.livejournal.com]

Cafell, surprisingly, is one of the names I want to use for a doggy one day.

I wish I knew. Maybe because Americans do them rather than Brits? I have no clue.

[evil-little-dog.livejournal.com]

Still, diving off the train is quite the Good Idea in such a situation. *giggles*

[lyrangalia]

I like it. You caught Kimbley's creepiness very well. It's a subtle sort of continued crazed evilness that I've never managed to capture, so I'm all the more pleased when other people manage.

The description's a little lavender for my liking, but drabbles are as drabbles do.

[nebroadwe.livejournal.com]

I like it. You caught Kimbley's creepiness very well. It's a subtle sort of continued crazed evilness that I've never managed to capture, so I'm all the more pleased when other people manage.

Kimbley's the kind of villain I can write with my Villain Trick: turn the affect knob ninety degrees away from its normal setting. So he's listening to the same superstitious whispers everyone else is listening to, and even making something like a sign against the evil eye like everyone else, but he goes straight for a final solution to the notional problem (in which he doesn't believe, anyway, so the whole thing's a joke to him).

The description's a little lavender for my liking, but drabbles are as drabbles do.

No, you're right about that. The longer I stare at that first sentence, the more inclined I am to revisit it at some point and tone it down a bit. The situation is apocalyptic, but Kimbley's perspective on it isn't, exactly. (I probably will keep the oxidation metaphor, though, since I went to all the trouble of looking up what copper does instead of rust. Can't quite kill that darling.)

[nebroadwe.livejournal.com]

I wish I knew. Maybe because Americans do them rather than Brits? I have no clue.

TDIR had a Brit (or at least a Scot) writing the screenplay, but by all reports he had absolutely no sympathy with the text, and the American director couldn't make a silk purse out of a sow's ear. Sigh.

[nebroadwe.livejournal.com]

I think part of the issue is I just have so many stories out there....

I hear you.

[evil-little-dog.livejournal.com]

That's even suckier. *SIIIIGH*

[treeflamingo.livejournal.com]

You realize that you creeped me out in 100 words? Reading the mind of a madman has always been one of my more beloved hobbies. I am thoroughly, thoroughly impressed with the amount of madness you have achieved in such a brief wordframe.

[nebroadwe.livejournal.com]

You realize that you creeped me out in 100 words?

Yay for successful creep!

Reading the mind of a madman has always been one of my more beloved hobbies.

Creepy isn't where I live most of the time, but I visit now and again, just to keep acquainted with it. Some kinds of madness I wouldn't feel comfortable attempting to write, but Kimbley's brand of sociopathy isn't one of them (see upcomment).